April 24 snow in spring
snow in spring (first) a white bulldog breathes on bright grass, coats row on row of pleading lilac buds, bellows, barks a bit, then trots off, *********stops, turns its head, pushes dirt with a...
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nice rendering of the dog. I can visualize every action. Well done.
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wow, i love the way "coats" behaves, for one, then the lilac buds, (as if the snow is doing that bulldog bouncer-walk, acting the tough...lots of play in this; a poem that illustrates itself. love it!...
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Thrilled you like it, Alison!"The Real Boat" looks like a great project I'll spend some more time looking at it.
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i don't think you need "is", you also added "who". i prefer the amazing effect of the more spare but see what others say something perfect in a white bulldogbreatheson bright grass music!
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Thanks, Alison! I put the first draft on top again. It was enjoyable to me to write it that way, but I was wondering if readers were getting it.
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because the title is so orienting, it just works wonders. (in my opinion!)i've been watching The Good Wife, a lawyered up series, to unwind, and in one funny episode everyone has to add "in my...
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Love the "in my opinion". Seems like everyone was saying that often several years ago.
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probably so!!! lol I'm several years behind what's out there, so I'm feeling like an innocent,it all seems fresh. as long as I get enough sleep. PS I'm only doing this chatting, because it's late,...
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Yes, definitely the one Alison favors. I love the spare form, the N's comic sensibility.
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Every time I read this poem aloud, I automatically substitute the pronoun 'it' with another one 'he' - is it really a Freudian slip...but must say I loved it!
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Ooo! I like the conceit! And let me put in a vote for draft one. Yes, isn't there something about a dog kicking up a little dirt that says "so there"? Kitties, too.
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Interesting idea, Shriiram!I originally had "he" instead of "it". I have a male dog, so perhaps this is why.I kind of wanted to change it to "she" I decided to use "it" because the N. does not...
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Hate to report this, but it was snowing when I got up today. Not fair!
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We had snow on Wednesday -- grr... a bulldog indeed! It does know that it cannot stay in our yards long though. lol!
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and no squalling, no squatting! we too have have snow in the air, yesterday, hail up a little north of here. I was remembering, my sister was born in this city (never comes here) in the middle of a...
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You guys up north! Please keep all the snow stuff up there, please. Frost here last night.
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